Not really a re-mix : Kiss Me Goodbye

[popproject]

Hi

Not sure if this is allowed, but this forum looked like the best option.

I was trying to create a basic song that might be somewhat in the style of DM. It is fairly simple and it would be great to get some feedback:

Title: Kiss Me Goodbye

https://soundcloud.com/user-66271793/dm2

I have a melody for the vocal, which fits these lyrics - the vocal is quite drawn out.

Lyrics:

Happy Birthday
Happy Birthday
One year old
So much to grow
One year old
So long to go
before you...

Die
Die
Say goodbye

Grandma stops by
But you’re too shy
All the dreams left
As time goes by
before you...

Die
Die
Kiss me goodbye

Apologies if I posted this incorrectly. DM fan since the 80's.

[member]

Definitely somewhat DM-like, but to me it has a more general electronica sound though, like it could be a general dance tune. It's good.